Page talk:Aleksander Głowacki - O odkryciach i wynalazkach.djvu/8

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Ping User:Nihil novi: I have made some minor revisions here. Can you review? If we agree that this is fine, than I will tick this page as validated. --Piotrus (talk) 09:48, 11 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thank you!
I think that, for consistency, "|Invention" should be corrected to "Invention".
I would keep the "a" in "a steel". The author means "a kind of steel", which does require the article adjective, "a".
In the passage about gunpowder, I notice that I added the word "three": "these three materials". Prus does not say "three", but I think the presence of that adjective does add clarity by emphasizing that the three substances must all be present to produce gunpowder. So I would keep "three", though it does not, strictly, appear in Prus' original text.
With those caveats, the page looks good. Thank you! Please let me know, if you have any questions.
Nihil novi (talk) 10:41, 11 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
Ping User:Piotrus: I have gone ahead and made the corrections that I mentioned above.
I appreciate your change of "mass" to "substance", and the commas. (Nota bene, an introductory adverbial phrase at the start of a sentence, if the phrase is brief, does not always require a comma.)
Thank you.
Nihil novi (talk) 11:58, 11 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
Ping User:Piotrus: I suggest not marking any page of the translation as "validated" until the whole translation has been reviewed. In my experience, questions often arise at various stages of the translation process.
However, in the course of reviewing the translation, please feel free to make changes directly in the yellow-tagged text. If I am aware that a page has been reviewed, I can examine the changes in the page's editing log.
Changes that you have recommended so far have improved the translation. It is helpful to have a second pair of eyes review a text.
Thanks.
Nihil novi (talk) 07:40, 13 July 2020 (UTC)Reply